Friday, November 13, 2009

What do you think of my story No. 2?

Philip the bee returns after a busy day's work at the florist's shop. "Hi honey, I'm home", he says happily.


"I want a divource", shouts his hairy battleaxe of a wife in return.


"Darling, has something been bugging you" he implores, his blurred eyesight compounded by the welling tears.


"You just bumble your way in here trailing pollen across my clean floor; that's it, I'll see the Queen tomorrow", Beryl droned waspishly through gnashing mandibles.


And so poor Philip's marriage came to an end; when word got out it caused quite a buzz around the hive. But it got worse; he was so badly stung by the legal costs that he had to sell his home and go live with dear old Ant Doris.

What do you think of my story No. 2?
Hi silkie, x





It's good, and has a happy ending, because --------------





Along came Alice with her waspish waist, and black lashes, who gets Philip out of a sticky situation.


Hive hot news for you says she, drone you worry anymore. Sting along with me and we'll pollinate galore, and bee happzzzzzzzzzzzzzzy





Yeah Yeah, I know, stick to Architecture!
Reply:I think it's a bit creepy - crawly back in to your hole and stop pestering us.


Seriously it's not bad - It must have given you a buzz to write something this funny.
Reply:Poor Philip - I'll look after him!
Reply:I liked this story better than the other one because it was so gritty %26amp; realistic. Don't worry about the spelling, we know it's hard to type with only three fingers on each hand.
Reply:Good i enjoyed this wee story well thought of. You might be onto something there. Keep up the good work.
Reply:It Bee a good one with a sting in the tail!!
Reply:if he,d cooked her a pollonaise sauce, he may have been able to keep her a bit longer. Never mind, marriages are usually fly by night these days. tell him to drink some red bull to give him wings and his hot line will be buzzing all summer long. xxxxx
Reply:we love em ! Keep em coming.


xx
Reply:learn to spell before you go back to writing
Reply:Very good! Hive been chuckling ever since I read it!
Reply:nice story, cant wait for another.
Reply:i like that story its cool keep them coming.

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